The thing about Red in this story is... okay. I wrote it in an absolute mad rush, and was intending to reveal towards the end that panic!sex was a regular thing between them. However, while writing it, it somehow ended up that this was the first time they'd done it. If I'd known this going in, I probably would've done things differently, but as it was, I didn't have time to change things.
The end result is that Red goes from absolutely freaking out to being completely in charge of the situation; if I'd known this was the first time they'd done it in the middle of a battlefield, I would've dropped more hints at the beginning to show that this was all old hat to Red, and that he wasn't nearly as scared as he was pretending to be.
As it is, he comes across as being freakishly manipulative, and a scarily good actor. Which I guess works, in its own way. XD
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The thing about Red in this story is... okay. I wrote it in an absolute mad rush, and was intending to reveal towards the end that panic!sex was a regular thing between them. However, while writing it, it somehow ended up that this was the first time they'd done it. If I'd known this going in, I probably would've done things differently, but as it was, I didn't have time to change things.
The end result is that Red goes from absolutely freaking out to being completely in charge of the situation; if I'd known this was the first time they'd done it in the middle of a battlefield, I would've dropped more hints at the beginning to show that this was all old hat to Red, and that he wasn't nearly as scared as he was pretending to be.
As it is, he comes across as being freakishly manipulative, and a scarily good actor. Which I guess works, in its own way. XD