Saiyuki (Hakkai/Gojyo)

[aonekosama.livejournal.com]

Title: Overbalance
Author: aonekosama
Rating: PG-13
Warnings: m/m sex
Word count: 451
A/N: For prompt: Saiyuki, Hakkai/Gojyo – neediness/begging – Hakkai doing the begging and Gojyo in a position of power



"Gojyo!"

Hakkai gasps when his back hits the mattress. I love it when he sounds like that. Surprised and annoyed at the same time.

"What?"

"I thought… Gojyo, stop and listen would you?"

I have no intention of doing that.

"I thought we agreed not to do this while we're on this mission. I thought we agreed it was… ah, stop that… best that way."

I know that. But this… I want to…

"Gojyo!"

"I know." There are things Hakkai has taught me without realizing it himself. One of them is, keep him busy and he won't have time to think good arguments. "But right now I need this and don't give a damn what we agreed." Another one is, honesty can throw him off guard.

Hakkai blinks and hesitates.

"You could have done it with someone from the bar. Why does it have to be me?"

"They could've said no." I slip my hand into his pants and Hakkai breathes in sharply.

"As if… I…" It's a lost game, but Hakkai wants to play it anyway. "Gojyo, get… get your hand off."

Nuh-uh. I can play this game, too.

"Gojyo, I said… unh… get your hand off my pants!" If I didn't know him, Hakkai could sound almost convincingly angry.

"But like I said, I need this." That's one of the things. I didn't know I could need something this bad. "Still, I'm not a bastard. I'm not going to do anything you honestly don't want me to. So…" I run my fingers across his chest, and my cock twitches when he swallows. "You can either ask me to fuck off or fuck you."

"You just… ah… want to hear me say it, don't you?"

"Okay. Hey, I can stop." Except that I can't, but I sit up and take my hand away, anyway. Please say it.

"No!" Hakkai gasps, reaching to grab my wrist. "Fuck me, Gojyo. Please," he says, and I can't tell if he's laughing or actually desperate behind that serious face.

After that Hakkai keeps saying 'please' and 'hurry' like he knows I want to hear him say exactly those words.

There are things Hakkai has taught me.

"Ah… Gojyo… please!"

One of them is, it can be delicious to be kept two seconds away from completion.

"Please, Gojyo, please, plea… oh… se…"

Another one is, it's sometimes fucking painful, too. I've thought about it. Two seconds. It would take about that much for me to say it.

"Let me… Gojyo, please… let… unh… me…"

Sometimes I need to say it as bad as I need to fuck him, or be fucked by him. Two frigging insect-small seconds, but the more I think about it…

"Gojyo!"

Comments

[iapetusneume.livejournal.com]

I love Gojyo's thoughts here. I think the look into his mind was my favorite part of this ficclet.

[froggie.livejournal.com]

I really like this; it says a lot in only a few words. Also, hot. :3

[0x.livejournal.com]

mm yummy :9

[animadri.livejournal.com]

Very very niceeeee!

[strawberry-smut.livejournal.com]

Loving the insider POV here!

[louiselux.livejournal.com]

I love it! Thank you so much. I really had no idea what you would make of the prompt, but this works so well. Gojyo's POV is really satisfying, because in the end, they each need the other just as much, so there is this really lovely sense of balance between them. Yes, and I also just like seeing Gojyo being all macho, because... hot. The sexual tension is awesome. :D

[aonekosama.livejournal.com]

Thank you all! ^__^ I would have loved to thank you all separately, but that would have been rather silly. ^^'

I'm glad you liked it, since I wasn't sure if this would be at all good or if I would be able to convey the feelings I wanted to. So yay!

Thank you, this was very encouraging. Now I dare to try write more things in the future.

[ranmaxryoga.livejournal.com]

oh yes, please write more in the future. this was spot-on gojyo!

[epiphanytiff.livejournal.com]

Well done! I liked how both characters were portrayed; how Gojyo prods Hakkai in the cunning, lascivious way that the kappa is known for. You do have a talent in conveying so much in few words! ^_^

[dusk-eyed.livejournal.com]

Mmmm, delicious! And proof that the elipses can be the sexiest piece of punctuation out there!

Wonderful job.